Published November 8, 2007
please reviewers.....be kind
I'm not great at poetry
Sometimes time cannot heal
We do walk again
We heal as much as we can
time does not stop for the wounded
Although the wounds themselves may heal
the scars always remain
marring the beauty of our innocence
We continue
But we never forget
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There doesn't seem to be much here. Not because it's so short, because there can be incredibly weighty poems that only last a few lines, but I felt like you were just talking in circles. Do you know what you were trying to say? Not just the main idea, but past that; every single meaning each word, and each combination could have?
Along the lines of "We continue/But we never forget", Kit wrote a lovely poem on the same topic called "corresponding" that you might like to check out.
PM me if you have any questions; I'd be happy to help ^_^
-Amelia
I liked how you spaced the last two lines away from the main body.
"We heal as much as we can" is kind of weak, "can" although does rhyme brings the poem down a bit. If you could find another word, the poem would be better. All in all, it was a good poem.
-bobiscool134